It started off quite good, with an amazing concept (parody lol), but the cliches were too much, too frequent, too forced. Maybe remove the cliches and tweak the story to have some of the characters have more depth, and I sense greatness in it. I just feel ... wasted potential in it. It felt repetitive and annoying in the end, due to the cliches, but this could be something good.
Tomoyuki
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LIKEThat ain’t true. The first few chapters were fantastically written. Turning into a demon is a tried and true cliche, and it fits the story well. It really does. Maybe you are busy with life, but oh man you are wrong when you say you are a bad writer. I think that you believe it has no potential because the backround world of the story might feel a bit rushed, however, if a little bit more backround was explained, and used in this, I would be in heaven
Tomoyuki:Sorry. Nah, it won't because I'm an awful writer, I don't have the talent or skills necessary to write a good story. There was never any potential in this story, and even if there was, I'm not the right person to unearth it.
Tomoyuki:Sorry. Nah, it won't because I'm an awful writer, I don't have the talent or skills necessary to write a good story. There was never any potential in this story, and even if there was, I'm not the right person to unearth it.
Tomoyuki:Sorry. Nah, it won't because I'm an awful writer, I don't have the talent or skills necessary to write a good story. There was never any potential in this story, and even if there was, I'm not the right person to unearth it.
Thanks, but there are a lot of readers who will disagree with you. And I'm more inclined to believe the majority. I appreciate the sentiment, though.
xxwiiwierdoxx:That ain’t true. The first few chapters were fantastically written. Turning into a demon is a tried and true cliche, and it fits the story well. It really does. Maybe you are busy with life, but oh man you are wrong when you say you are a bad writer. I think that you believe it has no potential because the backround world of the story might feel a bit rushed, however, if a little bit more backround was explained, and used in this, I would be in heaven
I believe this is just gas lighting and manipulation for sympathy. My respect points usually goes down for this type of comments
Tomoyuki:Sorry. Nah, it won't because I'm an awful writer, I don't have the talent or skills necessary to write a good story. There was never any potential in this story, and even if there was, I'm not the right person to unearth it.
Nope, just stating the truth. I've been writing for decades now. If I was any writer worth respecting or if I had any ounce of talent, I would have succeeded long ago. But you can believe whatever you want.
reestuds:I believe this is just gas lighting and manipulation for sympathy. My respect points usually goes down for this type of comments