Review Detail of Cookie4Life_ in A Bored Lich
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Barely any mistakes, could elaborate a bit more and still keep the mystery feel going, hopefully no random cannon fodder. Can’t wait for the school part, wonder if the plot holes on power levels could be fixed. Some character traits are plot holes, a few dirty parts, should be 14+ Hopefully the author can keep the action going until at least chapter 80, good job on leaving some exciting things to do by starting from a young age. Foreshadowing is good.
A Bored Lich
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How impulsive our character is is in a way a plot hole that could lead to problems later on, the MC is impulsive but still constantly thinking things out which could lead to a problem in the near future. Considering the type of plot you are currently doing, if you make the MC on the impulsive side, the storyline becomes predictable and that mystery feel that makes you able to do foreshadowing here would become something part time. With the character design you are currently using, it takes off the amount of predictability needed in every story to have stability in the plot.
Random_writer:Thank for your your review. Can you elaborate a little on what you consider plot holes in character traits so I can review them? Power levels I already plan to address later.
How impulsive our character is is in a way a plot hole that could lead to problems later on, the MC is impulsive but still constantly thinking things out which could lead to a problem in the near future. Considering the type of plot you are currently doing, if you make the MC on the impulsive side, the storyline becomes predictable and that mystery feel that makes you able to do foreshadowing here would become something part time. With the character design you are currently using, it takes off the amount of predictability needed in every story to have stability in the plot.
Random_writer:Thank for your your review. Can you elaborate a little on what you consider plot holes in character traits so I can review them? Power levels I already plan to address later.
I completely understand. Now that you pointed it out, I realized one of my books actually suffered from this before. I ended up having to abandon the book because my main character was the definition of impulsive. Although I loved writing him, I couldn't force him in a stable arc. He just did whatever he wanted. To be honest, it's a little scary how accurate you were with the predicting the path Doevm was heading. Did you pick up that skill from reading or something else? Ill set him back more towards his original design.
Cookie4Life_:How impulsive our character is is in a way a plot hole that could lead to problems later on, the MC is impulsive but still constantly thinking things out which could lead to a problem in the near future. Considering the type of plot you are currently doing, if you make the MC on the impulsive side, the storyline becomes predictable and that mystery feel that makes you able to do foreshadowing here would become something part time. With the character design you are currently using, it takes off the amount of predictability needed in every story to have stability in the plot.
My cousin is a writer and editor and she told me a few things... Somehow, it just came to me naturally
Random_writer:I completely understand. Now that you pointed it out, I realized one of my books actually suffered from this before. I ended up having to abandon the book because my main character was the definition of impulsive. Although I loved writing him, I couldn't force him in a stable arc. He just did whatever he wanted. To be honest, it's a little scary how accurate you were with the predicting the path Doevm was heading. Did you pick up that skill from reading or something else? Ill set him back more towards his original design.