Review Detail of MokouFriedChicken in Gumiho [ Hiatus ]

Intersesting plot, this one. A refreshing take on the werewolf genre. Critique time. Grammar has the occasional hiccups. Nothing too distracting maybe except for the grammar commanders. Another pass through can fix this easy. Dialogue. It felt natural and organic, but felt a bit stiff at times. People use contractions all the time. Might want to shorten the 'we will's in particular. Other than that, no problem. Prose is fine, but you might want to fuse some of the single sentence paragraphs into one text block. Common rule is if they're about the same thing, they belong in the same block. That's all. Keep on writing, this'll go far IMO 👍