Review Detail of bobozanga in Kingdom Of Hearts
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I like your story's plot and the flow of the story in general :D some grammar issues but I don't think it bothers me too much. keep writing <3 adding to the library
Kingdom Of Hearts
Sunny_Skies
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no problem, I'm happy to help. We're all here (including myself) to grow as authors! One example would be this sentence from Ch. 17: "Tell me, love." He whispered in her ear and her cheeks flashed pink. It would turn into: "Tell me, love," he whispered in her ear. Her cheeks flushed pink.
Sunny_Skies:If you don’t mind me asking, what would you describe as grammar issues (misspelling, wrong word in a context, etc,)? I’m sorry for asking it just confuses me a little :)
Omg! Thank you so much for pointing That out! :D If it isn’t too much to ask, are there a few grammar mistakes in every chapter or just a few? Because I checked and couldn’t find any big ones, just the small ones. And thank you for not minding as I am only one person and I’m only human 😁😌
bobozanga:no problem, I'm happy to help. We're all here (including myself) to grow as authors! One example would be this sentence from Ch. 17: "Tell me, love." He whispered in her ear and her cheeks flashed pink. It would turn into: "Tell me, love," he whispered in her ear. Her cheeks flushed pink.
Right, we’re only human 💛 there are a few every chapter but like you said, they’re very minor and are not that easy to pick up on! Trust me, as soon as i see a mistake i forget all about it and just keep reading because i’m so into the story 😅 don’t worry too much about the past chapters and just focus on proof-reading your future chapters a bit more :D there’s always Grammarly to help u out or other writers like myself that have no problem beta-reading chapters for technical errors (haters will say that real authors don’t “nEeD a PrOgrAM”. don’t listen to them they have no idea how hard it is to proof-read chapter after chapter until ur minds just done with it all 😂)
Sunny_Skies:Omg! Thank you so much for pointing That out! :D If it isn’t too much to ask, are there a few grammar mistakes in every chapter or just a few? Because I checked and couldn’t find any big ones, just the small ones. And thank you for not minding as I am only one person and I’m only human 😁😌
That’s the truth! Thanks for telling me and I really appreciate the feedback. Has the details been alright with you? I’ve had another person say that to get into the mood of the story, there will need to be details. I was worried about it because I wanted people to actually feel my stories.
bobozanga:Right, we’re only human 💛 there are a few every chapter but like you said, they’re very minor and are not that easy to pick up on! Trust me, as soon as i see a mistake i forget all about it and just keep reading because i’m so into the story 😅 don’t worry too much about the past chapters and just focus on proof-reading your future chapters a bit more :D there’s always Grammarly to help u out or other writers like myself that have no problem beta-reading chapters for technical errors (haters will say that real authors don’t “nEeD a PrOgrAM”. don’t listen to them they have no idea how hard it is to proof-read chapter after chapter until ur minds just done with it all 😂)
The details are fine, though there could be more. Same example would be that sentence I just mentioned: “Tell me, love,” his hushed words were an overload of steam that wafted into her ear and hovered in the tight space between their bodies. The steam heated her cheeks to a gentle pink. That might be too dramatic (as I have the opposite problem; i put too many details 🤡), but that’s the jist i think that person was talking about. Obviously, not every sentence of the chapter will be so heavy in detail and it’s important to have these “light” breaks in your scenes that consist of pretty straightforward action, which you’ve got down. It doesn’t affect your writing, but adding some extra pizzazz (excuse my cringe) to your work will spice things up and keep the reader to engaged, and it will keep them actively imaging your scenes in their head and will make them take your book word by word, leaving them with the lovely experience that is your book. with much love 💛
Sunny_Skies:That’s the truth! Thanks for telling me and I really appreciate the feedback. Has the details been alright with you? I’ve had another person say that to get into the mood of the story, there will need to be details. I was worried about it because I wanted people to actually feel my stories.
bobozanga:The details are fine, though there could be more. Same example would be that sentence I just mentioned: “Tell me, love,” his hushed words were an overload of steam that wafted into her ear and hovered in the tight space between their bodies. The steam heated her cheeks to a gentle pink. That might be too dramatic (as I have the opposite problem; i put too many details 🤡), but that’s the jist i think that person was talking about. Obviously, not every sentence of the chapter will be so heavy in detail and it’s important to have these “light” breaks in your scenes that consist of pretty straightforward action, which you’ve got down. It doesn’t affect your writing, but adding some extra pizzazz (excuse my cringe) to your work will spice things up and keep the reader to engaged, and it will keep them actively imaging your scenes in their head and will make them take your book word by word, leaving them with the lovely experience that is your book. with much love 💛