The spelling is awfully (I.E. the title is misspelled) The characters are flat (They do everything Van tells them to) It can be hard to tell who is speaking (Yes, sometimes you put the character’s name at the beginning like a script but seriously. Stick to one writing method) The story flow isn’t planned very well. I want to call it chaotic, but it can simply be called 'Bad'. If I was asked if this was readable or not, I would have to say not.
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