Review Detail of DeepThinkingBanana in Stop Messing Around, Mr Bo!

At first, I wasn't too interested with the story because I felt that the first part was boring and dragged out. But then I was curious on how tthe FL will deal with the antagonists so I kept on. It is really good. Face-slapping demoness is the best. But seriously, the grammar, pronouns used and even names gets mixed up. There are repeated paragraphs and words that used is incoherent. Please fix this up. It's annoying. It's a shame that a story this promising would have this problem.