Writing: no paragraphs, no spacing between dialog, just a big bunch of text. Stability: this man has no life outside Story: help everybody! Me? Oh I don't count. (mc) Character: I kept reading, hoping that the MC will get better... NOPE! Just a moron with a system, that remains a moron (telling everybody that he's reincarnated; tells everybody about his cheats; No protections against seers, prophets; Gamer's Mind is nonexistent even though he has it; three systems combined and he does not use them properly; and some more that I can't remember right now) World: It's a fanfic. The world is already there.
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