In my personal opinion, there's too many POV switches, if we were just gonna stay with the mc and just switch occasionally like every 10 chapters, then it would have been fine. But if might be better to just stay in third person, there's also some spelling mistakes few miss placed names but it's fine. I'm only on chapter 20 so far but most of the characters seem a little"flat" like you need to build them up more, the personalities feel stereotypical.
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