Review Detail of Tariplar in The Morning Star 1

I believe the style of writing utilized in this novel is among the best possible. It's a unique blend of first-person and stream of consciousness that helps to create a fluid main character and an imaginative and lively world without forcing the reader through blocks of tedious prose. This combines with a more segmented transition between chapters. Instead of forcing the characters every action to be narrated to the audience, we get brief glimpses into the main characters' life that build the world succinctly and satisfyingly. There are a few minor grammar and word choice errors and a limited vocabulary, but they don't hinder the story. Since the author is a high-schooler, its already impressive language command. My only hope is that, when editing the story to remove small errors, the author's voice and passion aren't lost to endless editing. Take pride in what you've created :) The characters are lovable and well written. The main character is relatable in her anxieties and clumsiness, which are foiled excellently by the supporting role, Jack. He is a well-written child who acts his age in the ways you would expect. Other than an exposition chapter that could have been handled better, the world-building in this novel is natural and exposes a greater whole from the parts we see. My suggestion here is that the best world-building doesn't come from what you tell the audience but rather, what you let them assume.