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Reading the first 5 chapters, it reminds me heavily of 'That Time I was Reincarnated as a Slime'. It gives off that kind of feel in terms of plot. The MC has a bit more personality though and is very snarky. Since he can't talk, you fully see how his mind works, and I do like those bits that give him more of a face than the generic protagonist. One bit of criticism - the progression of his abilities as he consumes bigger and stronger beings like Katamari Damacy does start getting repetitive after a few chapters of similar things but with different beings. It might be wise to shake things up soon by having our little friend go on a journey and explore the world a bit. Reading only about him surviving and figuring out his skills soon gets old, so you may want to show us more about this interesting world that you are trying to create, not just what is in the immediate view of the protagonist. Other than that, keep an eye on your sentence structure. Your sentences need 3x times as many commas as what you've been using. But it's not so bad that it detracts from ease of reading.

Tales of a Killer Flower

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Thanks for the review! The exploration bit will be starting within the next couple of chapters since I set up the precursor for why he'll have to move in the latest chapter. As for grammar I'll try and fix that. Maybe start using grammarly again and save up for the premium version if it helps with making the writer quality better. As for what it reminds you of I can't say I didn't take inspiration from it. It was one of the three main novels I took inspiration from with the other to being kumu desu ga and chrysalis. All three are favorites of mine.