Review Detail of maskines in The Origin of the Cosmos

I liked the work, it has potential but some details are missing. How could you describe the fights, the scenarios, the characters, etc. In the same way that you describe *** scenes ... and slow the development of the MC. Of course, I don't know if you made this novel with the intention of being R-18, or did the work to be the same, you're writing with MC having *** and skipping several layers of cultivation at once, but for me, if you don't did just R-18 and a super fast development, at least consider some suggestions and maybe read some works on cultivation to help you write. Improve your work. I made this comment to help the author to improve the work from my point of view, I hope this comment helps you.