Review Detail of ButtNakedMan in The Avarez Theft

a good first chapter, but it could be a whole lot better I recommend the author to show us which one the mc is. It started with a we, so im kinda confused which is the mc. A bit of context/narration about what is going on will also help, not suddenly why they are in the station. The chap need some editing, the dialogue in a paragraph should be separated when its a different person that is talking. And use "..." for talking out loud, and '...' when its a thought. Some grammatical error but nothing noticeable. But good overall, keep up the goodwork