Review Detail of P1zaBox in My Dragon System
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Story is decent, good compared to what’s on this website. There are some small grammatical errors, which don’t really matter. However there are many inconsistencies with common sense. In the first chapter, the Sen is said to have been hunted for around 1000 years and has every family member and loved one perish around him. Yet his first reaction upon seeing his human parents is a little shock.... and NO ANGER. He doesn’t get angry yet he lost so much in 1000 years. He even gets mischievous with his dad vomiting on him. Further on when Sen encounters Gary, Gary disses his parents. Mind you at this time Sen was around 5(i could be wrong cause short term memory). Sen lashes out at Gary and tries to fight him. This action is largely illogical since he lived for at least 1000 years yet his mind did not mature during this period. Some may say oh his parents were insulted but that doesn’t make sense either since he only lived with them for 4 years. 4 years may grow some attachment if he were a baby who didn’t know anything but this guy is a 1000 year old mature dragon. There is more i could rant about but I’m too lazy. Overall, this novel is decent and has potential. It has some grammar issues and many inconsistencies that basically render his backstory as a dragon pointless in my opinion
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hi author here maybe I can answear some of your questions but it is a little bit of a spoiler. The weird swing in minds is because the body and mind is never ment to be his, his soul has entered that of a human and he has taken over. (will be explained way way later on) but there is a small hint when his hair changed from black to red. it also explains why his mindset is actulley that of his actual age rather then a 1000 year old dragon. so just like a kid he becomes emotional. the dragon part and the back story is for later on in the story and for his powers of course. as his system allows him to unlock his old dragon powers for each task he completes. thanks for the review thank you for reading and hope you continue to.
hi author here maybe I can answear some of your questions but it is a little bit of a spoiler. The weird swing in minds is because the body and mind is never ment to be his, his soul has entered that of a human and he has taken over. (will be explained way way later on) but there is a small hint when his hair changed from black to red. it also explains why his mindset is actulley that of his actual age rather then a 1000 year old dragon. so just like a kid he becomes emotional. the dragon part and the back story is for later on in the story and for his powers of course. as his system allows him to unlock his old dragon powers for each task he completes. thanks for the review thank you for reading and hope you continue to.
hi author here maybe I can answear some of your questions but it is a little bit of a spoiler. The weird swing in minds is because the body and mind is never ment to be his, his soul has entered that of a human and he has taken over. (will be explained way way later on) but there is a small hint when his hair changed from black to red. it also explains why his mindset is actulley that of his actual age rather then a 1000 year old dragon. so just like a kid he becomes emotional. the dragon part and the back story is for later on in the story and for his powers of course. as his system allows him to unlock his old dragon powers for each task he completes. thanks for the review thank you for reading and hope you continue to.