Review Detail of donschmiddy in Is that a Wisp?

I only managed to get through the first 6 chapters.... The grammar and syntax are beyond bad. The author miss-uses tenses a lot. Infact he interchangeably uses them in every other sentence. Even the average 6th grader should have a better grasp on atleast the 4 simplest and when to use them: Simple past/past progressive and simple present/present progressive. To the author: I am not trying to disparage your work but you are honestly not that gifted when it comes to grammar, either study up or get an editor to do the work for you. One last thing: even in the earlier chapter you are artificially inflating your wordcount. You are creating needlessly complicated sentences that no one understands and break syntax. Keep the sentences short, it will improve flow, you'll make less mistakes and the reader will in no way be confused.