Review Detail of MokouFriedChicken in Sweet Surrender: The CEO's Second Wife

This certainly as surprise. A story set in the Philippines.. That'd explain some of the few English ticks that I spotted. TL:DR for the review: It's great, but would benefit greatly from a remaster. Criticism time. Story and pacing is fairly done, no problem there. Dialogue however, feels a tad bit stiff at times. Might want to make it feel more natural with just a wee bit more contraction usage. (ie: 'I'm' instead of 'I am') Grammar could also use some polishing, and there are times where there's just one giant block of dialogue with no stopping in between. Break those up with a dash a descriptive writing. Describe their cadence, their tone, as they're doing their monologue to spice things up. That's it I guess. Great effort. Keep on keeping on 👍