Review Detail of NotUse in Adventures of a normal human

The first few chapters reminded me of a movie entitled Lucy. The narration is genuine, wonderful. Quotes could be found here and there which is fine for me. The story development seems to be too fast, perhaps the author could slow things down a bit. Character Design is good enough but I would like the author to describe more about the looks of the characters aside from the common eye and hair color. Chapter was confusing but the concept is intriguing for me. The quality of the writing is good, and as for grammar I have no right to judge it since even I am bad at such a thing! Still, proofreading from time to time will surely help you improve your writing skills! The plot is interesting, very very captivating. It grabbed my attention, hooking me from the very first chapter of the book. Paragraphs are not that lengthy. Everything seems absolutely great, just the story development which seems to be fast. Keep writing author, and good luck to you! -DZSC