I like everything abou the story except for your writing style. No offence but you write like a child. The sentences are awkward and you keep using the wrong tense. I can understand grammatical errors, but please fix your sentence structures. If you can do that, your story has the potential to be one of the best on this app.
Ichiryuu
Liked it!
LIKEThank you for saying that! I know my writing skills are not that great because English is not my mother tongue but I will improve it as I continue writing this! The only thing that I can promise is to improve my grammar and writing skills. After improving that, I'll edit this novel later so please bear with it now! Thank you!