Review Detail of Saadido_ in In the DC World with a System

Keep in mind I only got to ch.20. Really f'n boring. The beginning was promising 'like woo a system story, this will be a fun little op trot through the dc comics.' Nah, the author is kinda not that smart. To give perspective, he thinks humans use less than 10% of their brains type of not smart. The author time skips the whole training arc! Any character growth, story progression, attachment to the characters, everything absolutely crucial to story telling is thrown right down the toilet. And the worst part is there's zero scenes where the mc works for any of his advantages, so the character is instantly unlikable. Then suddenly There's a ten chapter paint drying extravaganza of a skirmish in which the Mc doesn't even participate only characters introduced during the chapters. It;s clear to everyone reading that this author thinks writing works like a movie where flashing lights and beautiful girls can carry the team like a diamond 3 boasting silvers, but nah m8. Flashing lights aren't impressive as dry letters on a page. Don't get me started on the dialogue. That thing is written by a 1990's AI attempting human speech while running on a toaster. Bad. This is actually kinda sad. The good parts are the premise and the grammar is passable. That's about it. How to fix this mess is easy. First you have to realize that the reader can't see the cool bits and bobbles happening in your head. The cool stuff your mc does should be written down the mistakes that have an effect on him should be written down. The same goes for all important characters. Sex appeal is a crutch you can lean on pretty easily. The first arc is meant to sell your reader the characters and premise you created. Keep it simple. Less is more in this case. Characters should be as human as you can possibly make them. Even the epic heroes of the past still have fatal flaws and personality. Keep reading good books. Last but not least don't stop writing any skill is impossible to perfect the first hundreds of hours you spend on it, but that's the toll you pay to maybe become the next J.R.R. Martin or Tolkien. Maybe even Rowling but try not to go too insane like that one. Hope this gave you some much needed criticism author.