Review Detail of mooneless in Reborn: The Unexpected Twist
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Half the time i dont understand whats going on, we move from location to location in seconds, everything goes to fast and i feel it is very messy. Nothing is builded up, one chapter we are at a banquet, next chapter we are at a birthday party, and there is no story in between, it just jumps from one moment to a new one... and the characters names are to similar, it takes some time before you start getting who is who.
Reborn: The Unexpected Twist
ShinSungmi
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would just apologies for the harsh critic i gave you in my other comment, i was pretty mad before i read your story, and i ended up lashing out my anger on you.
ShinSungmi:Thank you for pointing out the mistakes. I will try to improve in the future :-)