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Vicarious_Writer
Vicarious_WriterLv34yrVicarious_Writer

I'm a heterosexual male, and I love this book. I am only saying this because some people will run away just because it says BL. I don't want them to miss out on the adventure that awaits. Now I can give you my review. Writing Quality: Four stars The author has a clear grasp of the English language and knows what she is writing, unlike me. The only thing that stops it from getting five stars is some minor grammar errors: unintentional malapropisms, passive voice misuse, and some past-present tense mistakes. However, as I have stressed, they do not appear everywhere and won't stymie an enjoyable reading experience. Stability of Updates: Five stars The author does what she promised. She gives the readers(us) chapters every day. She even uploaded a double the next day when she skipped a day. I proudly give her a five here. She is reliable and I am more than content. Story Development- 5 stars Although there are some things left unclear: dad and stepmom related. I am sure this is the Authors intention and not that she forgot or is too lazy to write about it. I know, because the story itself is very clear and engaging. The pacing isn't too hot nor is it too cold, it's just right. In fact, when she uploads I drop what I am doing, I grab a packet of chips (crisps), sit back and enter the world, she so assiduously provides. Character Design- 4 stars I'm giving a four-star here, only because as of now, the only developed character is Xinya. Also, Xinya isn't your typical main character, and I like his character. Moving on to the supporting cast, which in this case is the NPC's. The main character has only made one friend as of yet. This is not an issue, as I've said before, the pacing of the story is a beautiful experience. Now with regards to the NPC's, I'm not so happy. The NPC's are supposedly lifelike, however, they felt programmed to me. Maybe, it is just because most of them are female (I'm not sexist, there's a reason I'm saying this. I can't tell you without spoiling the story). So far the only lifelike NPC I have encountered was at chapter 18. She asked proper questions and it wasn't a simple, "I need help, hey, you help me!" This does not happen in real life. When someone has a problem, we don't just broadcast it to the first person we see hoping that they will save us. I've wanted to tell the author this for a while, but I was afraid she would work on those chapters and because of that not upload the next day. Yes, I know how selfish this is, but it's also a testament as to how much I am enjoying the story. If the NPC's become more life-like or a personality enriched supporting cast member shows up, I will update this review. However, as of now, I am content with a four-star, on character design. World Background- 5 stars I'm giving this five stars. I don't need to explain why. I think I've gushed enough about how much I love this novel. If you are reading this stop. Instead, read this novel. Bless your eyes.

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Momocatt
MomocattAuthorMomocatt

Thank you so much for such a lovely review, it made me smile while reading it. I will try to keep living up to your expectations. ^^ You were right on some points my grammar isn't that great x.x, the BL tag does make people run, which is too bad. Also the NPC's well I think I got better at writing them, I kept thinking programmed people than lifelike early on. I really enjoy listening to my reader's opinions, so please keep them coming in later chapters. =^-^=

Seiju27
Seiju27Lv5Seiju27

BL's not that bad but it's better for boyxgirl romance though

Sphook
SphookLv10Sphook

The story itself is not a problem.. But the fact is that no matter how good the story is, as long as it's BL many will stay away from this.

Valkyrie_Anna_B
Valkyrie_Anna_BLv10Valkyrie_Anna_B

People should actually try reading before running away if they don’t like it the don’t like, but how are they going to know if they don’t try to read it!

SamStrike_
SamStrike_Lv3SamStrike_

How heavy is the actual BL? Is there like, explicit sex/kiss?

Valkyrie_Anna_B:People should actually try reading before running away if they don’t like it the don’t like, but how are they going to know if they don’t try to read it!
Aion27
Aion27Lv5Aion27

We have not yet seen any of that so far. When the author said it will be a slow burn it truly is. While we all think we know who the couple will be we haven’t exactly been told they are. Also, they have just finally seen each other and that was pretty much to say hi and that was it. It was also through Melting Snow’s video chat so they haven’t even truly met yet. So I would say it will be awhile before we get an answer to your question.

SamStrike_:How heavy is the actual BL? Is there like, explicit sex/kiss?
AWASUNG_MOMA
AWASUNG_MOMALv1AWASUNG_MOMA

thx this book is rly good

SweetLollipop
SweetLollipopLv4SweetLollipop

Is this Yoi?

Kailour
KailourLv6Kailour

I cannot express how much I agree with this review, its so refreshing to see as well. I hate that so many people see the BL tag then immediately run away with their tails between their legs. What makes or breaks a novel is the world it portrays, not a character within that stories sexual orientation. I'll be reading this novel very soon, and hope I can enjoy it as much as you have.

Sphook
SphookLv10Sphook

It's BL. It really doesn't matter how exceptional the story if it's BL.

Valkyrie_Anna_B:People should actually try reading before running away if they don’t like it the don’t like, but how are they going to know if they don’t try to read it!
FalsifiedKing
FalsifiedKingLv2FalsifiedKing

I’ll trust you on this one chief, let’s see how this Novel turns out for me.

Kailour
KailourLv6Kailour

Its a shame I can't edit comments so I'll just have to delete the old one, Apparently the author decided to continue the novel after all? Great news, I can finally pick up this novel in full confidence.

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chris_dickson
chris_dicksonLv1chris_dickson

Soo is it rl gay or in game gay because if the dude is railing him as a gimp this be stupid romance build up XD

Cartus
CartusLv4Cartus

Until I started reading reviews I didn't know it's BL 'cause I don't read the tags. I just like the name of the novel, I click it, read some chapters and if I like it I just continue reading XD

DOMINC_SUKS
DOMINC_SUKSLv11DOMINC_SUKS

a kiss hide your children

SamStrike_:How heavy is the actual BL? Is there like, explicit sex/kiss?
Mad_Smile
Mad_SmileLv14Mad_Smile

Thank you for this awesome review mate.