I think the idea for the story so far is pretty good! It's a shame I'm not a big fan of the style of the MC and humour. I think her development is kind of weird, from being unknowing of anything, to suddenly making a breakthrough like two paragraphs later... The story is pretty well written and I can tell you've put in thought when it comes to the plot!
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