I gotta say that this is pretty good. It's starting to make sense in the later chapter. But seriously, you need to learn more for your grammar and enrich your vocabularies to make it more interesting. I don't know for the other, but your idea sounds quite original to me (for a fanfiction, of course). Keep up your good work...
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