Review Detail of MephistoPheles7 in Prime Originator
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Oh man how should I put this, everything from writing quality to the power scaling and stuff like character chart and pacing of the story is excellent. my only problem is with the protagonist himself, he's supposed to be a Divine level cultivator who has comprehended laws but I don't see no signs of maturity or wisdom in his nature. He loses control quickly, is submissive, has 0 control over his actions when he's under the influence of his emotions and lastly he has this aura around him from his previous life which screams pampered and raised in a greenhouse.
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that's literally what the MC is, a pampered young master who reached the divine level through pills. He wasn't that old, to begin with, and only reached the entry level of the divine realm. The story is about him improving himself whilst trying to survive everything that threatens him and the people around him. There's a lot of stories about the young masters offending the mc and getting killed by them, but not all young masters are inherently bad and only become bad due to certain events in life. I wanted to write a story where the young master becomes the mc, is given a second chance to change himself and become someone worthy of respect, or something like that haha Anyway, thank you for writing a review :)
You know what? The fact that he's a pampered young master but trying to act mature makes MC annoying. I mean really annoying. It was as if you are trying to create the image of a mature and intelligent MC but horrendously failed because of cliches after cliches. Improving himself? So laughable. Those cliches will not work if MC is not acting stupid. I don't see any improvement from this. It's but a loop hole. In conclusion, it's not justifiable to dump all MC "errors" with the reason of "he's a pampered young master and trying to improve".
Pointbreak:that's literally what the MC is, a pampered young master who reached the divine level through pills. He wasn't that old, to begin with, and only reached the entry level of the divine realm. The story is about him improving himself whilst trying to survive everything that threatens him and the people around him. There's a lot of stories about the young masters offending the mc and getting killed by them, but not all young masters are inherently bad and only become bad due to certain events in life. I wanted to write a story where the young master becomes the mc, is given a second chance to change himself and become someone worthy of respect, or something like that haha Anyway, thank you for writing a review :)