The grammar isn't bad. However, the plot is a bit too undeveloped. It is unable to make any emotional changes to my mind. All in all, it is too unrealistic and predictable.
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LIKEJesse_Webbeking:Yeah, I have to refute that. Not only is the grammar terrible, the choice in wording is extremely repetitive and the context of words and phrases used is often completely incorrect.