Review Detail of Eslyna in One Piece-Fantasy System
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Writing was ok but here is whats bad. First of all HUGE plothole in your whole story. MC asks to be there 2 years before Rodger dies. Then he goes on to say he shall rescue Nami after a year... Im not sure if shes even born yet, even if she is shebwouldnt be at that island yet but with her original family, than even ifshe is for that Arlong wouldnt be going to East Blue for a while... Second Huge Plot Hole is there cant be two of the same devil fruits yet you made it so... Conflicts with wholr essence of One Piece, u can nanufacture the but those are super weak and obvious defects Story writing was average, and prologue was not that good in my opinion, was just info dump to satisfy his buffs. LASTLY MC is way too overpowered with how you wrote the system... Its worse than other OP MCs in the fanfic genre I read so far for One Piece... Also then theirs the hiatus warning. Updates started to slow this month and now hasnt been updated for 10 days when I checked so probably author decided to stop writing, I checked last chap but no notification that he needs to do sonething etc. 1.8
One Piece-Fantasy System
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I havent read that or watched n a while, so u might be right but Im honestly too lazy to check... But as stated, 1fact ik for sure is that arlongs crew shouldnt be there at that island yet
boltgvb:Ok Nami is born go look at the ep that shows her history she was 2 and her so called mom just got killed but the fish men so he can go and save her before that happens
boltgvb:Ok Nami is born go look at the ep that shows her history she was 2 and her so called mom just got killed but the fish men so he can go and save her before that happens