Review Detail of Storian in please reset the booktitle Storian 20231218092329 38

Hallo, everybody I'm the writer of this little story. I first off want to thank everybody for reading my first story and appreciate that very much. The reason for making this was more to see what others found of my writing style and if there is a future for it. Hopefully people will comment about this and will help me by showing my faults. If you don't like it, please tell a bit about the "why" and the same if you liked this little story (now 1 chapter). Thank you for your time.