Review Detail of XOMatsumaeohana in Identity Thief

Review Swap Valid for Chapter 4 Writing Quality: 🤔 This story is written in first person narrative, something people tend to avoid here on WN. While there are quite a few mistakes grammar and punction wise. The writing is readable and flows, doesn't confuse the readers in anyway. Just some suggestions • Don't capitalize when somebody is yelling (looks unprofessional) most people tend to use actions to clarify when a person is shouting, rather than using capital letters. For example, using words like 'yelled' or 'shouted' would do. • Description is important: Character movements, raising - lifting their hand. Character thoughts and feelings. In chapter 2- the FL getting beat up, is that supposed to be a flashback? Not very clear, hope the author can add some description for this. • Longer chapters. The suggested chapter count for webnovels tend to be 800-1.500 words +. Character Development: From what I've read so far. We get a weak female lead. But I suppose this gradually will change as the story progresses? I hope the author gives sufficient explanation for the background story of our FL. Story Development and World Background: Too soon to tell, so I'm putting these two together. For World background right now it's lacking, of course this is only because the novel has just started. But I feel like the author could describe the setting more especially in the opening chapter. Opening chapter just jumps to speaking dialouge with no description. Where is the scene taking place? Introduction of the FL? The other characters? Need description. Hope the author can work on these things. The story development is fast pace, were immediately thrown into the scene of the FL discovering the two identities of her Bf? (Sorry if I misunderstood this) and then the following chapter the FL is in a new town and there was a time skills. Again sorry if I got this wrong, but the lack of description regarding the scene changes make it difficult to understand. I do get a very strong 'mystery' and 'revenge' vibes from this story though. Overall: This story needs some good old editing to fix up the grammar. Some scenes need to be rewritten to clarify what's going on in the scenes. The plot is very interesting, but in had a hard time understanding with the lack of description regarding scene changes.