Review Detail of noctifer in Because it's only you

Here we go. Before I start, I'd like to suggest something. Don't put something talking about how bad of a writer you are and that you're not a native speaker where your synopsis is meant to be. You're driving away readers. If you must, put them in a author's note, or at the end of the synopsis. Writing quality Quite good for a non-English speaker. I'd suggest to learn more about grammar and punctuation, or use something like grammerly. You tend to use a lot of elli**is, which are the ... Watch out, as normal ellipses are only three dots. Any more and your writing feels messy. Using elli**is in writing is kind of a oomph sorta thing, it sounds like everything is uncertain and there are unnecessary pauses. Maybe add more descriptions? There were some oddly worded sentences that couldve been worded better, as well as some questionable dialogue(here's where the elli**is really took away any of my good feelings towards the FL. It made her sound a bit slow and almost as if she was unable to speak properly) It's readable though. The mistakes doesn't take much away from the story. I like the usage of first person. You don't see that a lot on this site. Updates 5 stars in good faith. Not going to say much because I too used to have problems with updating Story development So far, not much has happened. To be fair, there's only been three chapters. We do get a sliceful of FL's back story. Right now, it's at the brink of just introducing the MCs. Character design FL- as I said earlier, whatever hopes I had for the FL went out the window following her slow dialogue. It got better though, as the story went on. She is a bit head strong, but I haven't really gotten much of her personality set down. ML- seems OK. Still wonder why he gave the other girl the money, obviously she would latch onto him. You'd think that for a CEO, he'd have been able to figure that out before giving the money away. And that's pretty much everyone noticeable. World building Not a lot of world building. All there was was a country A which FL got a degree from. Cool. But even in today's world, each and every country is different from each other. What makes your country tick? Describe it! Describe the city, what the FL sees, hears, smells as she walks down the sidewalk. There's only been three chapters, so you can't really do a lot of world building at this point in time. I'm assuming its a mirror image of our Earth though. Sorry if this was a bit harsh. Don't take it to heart. Your story has good potential, it just needs some fixing.