Review Detail of Chryiss in Because it's only you

Writing: 4 It's pretty good for an non-native English speaker. The majority of the mistakes are minor such as punctuational, mostly in the form of commas when using conjunctions. The rest are just awkward phrasing from not being familiar with English grammar such as "But still I fell from the ground." It should be I feel "to" the ground. One can't fall from the ground, from is saying that I fell from this point (the ground) to the (supposed) ground, which doesn't make sense. Another example is "Then I came to my senses and thanked." It's just missing thanked "him" or the person being thanked. Little things overall that an editor could fix. Updates: 5 It's a one chapter challenge, so... Character: 4 There's a decent fleshing out of the MC in the given short chapter. Story, World: 3 Again, because it's short, this is hard to judge since little of the story and world has been explored. Likely, this will be better with more chapters. As it stands, the story hasn't progressed anywhere except the meeting of the possible ML. For the world, instead of saying "Country A" just make up an actual country rather than using letters. This isn't good for story immersion. Better yet, as this is a modern story, use a real place in the world. It's okay if the details of the location aren't completely correct--most people wouldn't know anyway. 3.8 Overall.