Review Detail of FrozenSynapses in WIFE!!!! PLEASE BITE ME!!

The writing quality could use some work. Try Grammarly, it's free and I use it to fix writing errors. The author seems to be good with updating routinely. The chapters, in the beginning, are short, but they do get longer (which is typically a good thing). The story is coming along, but here's the main issue for me when reading it: there's no information on where they are, what the character looks like, gender, eye color, posture, environment, etc. These small things make the reader able to connect and really imagine what is taking place in the book; these are very valuable things that you should try to incorporate into your book. Get a feel for how other really quality books describe people and the environment.