Review Detail of Scarlettbunny in WIFE!!!! PLEASE BITE ME!!

Alright so here it is. You do not have to name your chapters "Chapter #" the numbers are already given to you so you just come up with a name. Next the grammar and spelling are not that great. You spelled orange with two "R's" instead of one. Next your characters are there and you have pretty much set up the FL but it's the bare minimum. There is no real meat to your characters just the raw bone. Your FL has bad dreams, is moody and antisocial, she also kills a**holes, fine got it but what else? You jump around so much it looks more like a script for a movie. which isn't a bad thing but it's missing the bulk of the story. Basically see it as a movie in your head. Write what you see, the scenery, the types of clothing, the weather, the characters facial features and reactions. make us see what you see and then add in your lines. Give your book some life. Get rid of the sections. Make it flow into one another. Example. FL drops child as if her fingers were burning from his touch. She distorted her face with disgusted and fear, she turned around afraid to keep to see what the boy would say or do. She runs off, not daring to look back. She needs to get away, her safety is and always be top priority she would never make the same mistake, never again. There was no way her heart would forgive her if she did. Unknown to them a dark shadow watched the scene. He quickly moved from behind the tree and stealthily made it back to his master's side. "Wolf report." A low voice growl as he watched his subordinate kneel before him. "I have confirmed that she has not awakened to her true identity." Etc. Etc. Etc. Look at the end of the day it's your novel. The concept is interesting but it needs so much love and attention. Especially with all the information you have up front. Get a note pad and write down your characters. What you want your ending to be and how each character relates to one another. Then piece together your story. Don't give up just put some more meat into your story.