Review Detail of IceSnowball in Tatzelwyrm

Hi😄 I read up to chapter 6 The writing quality is good, there are little errors. I feel that the chapters are a bit long to read. The synopsis clearly describes who the protagonist is and what kind of world the story is set in. I like how this story is realistic and the characters are portrayed like real humans, especially since it is set in a fantasy world. The second last sentence of paragraph one in chapter one: instead of just 'had', maybe 'they had' or 'and had'? The world building and story building are very detailed. I feel that the transition from chapter 1 to chapter 2 is a bit confusing, but it makes sense. In the middle of chapter two, the scene where the mother embraced the child before their separation: 'One of them did not seem to entirely grasp the gravity of this moment' It was a bit confusing when I read 'one of them' because although I could guess who it was, it wasn't clear. I really like how the author is able to make a dangerous situation seem like it is dangerous - because sometimes I read in stories where it's meant to be a dangerous situation but the characters are carefree and there is little suspense. In the middle of the escape scene in chapter two, the author wrote: 'It looked at him with big wet eyes.' I think 'it' isn't usually used when talking about a child. I like how there is always something happening within the story (the story is always moving, not static -) and the descriptions are great. There is a lot of detail in this novel and the story direction is good😊