Review Detail of If_only in The Avarice System

The first thing I want to say about this novel is that it needs some serious editing. The awful grammar really messes up some very good parts. My opinion is that the story is moving rather fast, the mc is leveling way too fast. Its rushed. But it has a lot of potential. As long as the author slows down a bit. The characters are very interesting and the plot is quite good. As it is now, even though the story is good and worth reading, its tiring. If the author slows down the story and some editor fixes the problematic parts, it would be worth 4.5 and above rating.