While the story is generic its not horrible. I can see the hype that can be brought with each big moment but when accompanied by shit characters I cant feel any excitement when a time like this comes. The language barrier is massive (If it is a language barrier) and it ruins any chance the story has because of the inability to dive indepth to situations and characters. Its a bummer but I cant judge you for it. The dialouge is unnatural and with constant “he said” and “she said” everything feels like a waste of time. The pace is godspeed and no actions are decribed. You say something like “he pulled out his sword and started attacking everyone and they got scared and ran away”. This isnt interesting. At least try to be in depth. And emojis are used. Why did you decide to do that. This is a piece of literature, not a text message.
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