Review Detail of Itzheyday in Doomsday Pillars

This doesnt deserve such a high rating for a story that went premium. Typos and choppy sentences galore, at least edit them yikes. Eeeeeddjejejeejerjddjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjddjddjdjdjdjdjddjddjddjdddjdjdjdnddrnrrnrnrniddjeneisidneneeieeiekkekkeekekekekekekeke