Review Detail of bxjane in Sweet Avenger's Secret Marriage

It is quite interesting. I like that it is a fast pace one. The author does not give a lot of fillers such as describing everything before continuing the story. However, it is quite confusing the sequencing of events is not that polished that makes it very hard to understand. Please make sure that before going into another event in your story you should end the other properly. Maybe you could fix this together with the errors in your grammar. Thank you.