Review Detail of Book_Keeper in She Knew She Loved Him (Completed)

Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Technical: Overall, it’s good. There’re some typos that can easily fixed with proofreading. One awkward phrasing, “get the crème de la crème of him,” I’m assuming this means “get the best of him,” if so, “crème de la crème” isn’t the right phrasing to replace “best.” The former is a noun trying to replace an adjective, so this would be incorrect. “Crème de la crème” is more literally, the best person or thing, so using it in this context would awkwardly mean, “get the best of the best of him,” which has a different meaning. Also, this different use of language doesn’t fit in with the rest of how the story is mainly written. Characters: Introductions are short but satisfactory as long as more of their personality shines through later events. Realistically, it seems off that she’s so preoccupied with the new neighbor to even dream of said person as a puppy. What is realistic is that even after Alex saw Zunnie several times, he didn’t go crazy love at first sight must chase down this woman. Alex has a bit more personality, and his character is slightly more realistic than Zunnie, at least. The choice of Little Thing seems somewhat derogatory as I doubt women would want to be called that by their lover. The other characters follow the typical tropes of *******, jealous girl or rival, kind family member, friend, etc. .........(cont.) The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/12/review-she-knew-she-loved-him-pgimz/ Thank you!