Review Detail of LuxVonDeux in Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Secret (EN)

Ok here the thing First, your grammar suck, i like your writing style not fast not slow but boi your grammar suck Second, 5 for update Third, 5 for story development Forth, 2 star for character design because you dont explain what MC we have, what kind background he have i dont even know this is pure SI or OC-SI Fifth, 2 star for world background because you just follow canon so far not just follow canon but rehas canon with our MC in harry place so yeah