Review Detail of UnjustlyUnderpaid in The Inklings

The story development is pretty interesting so far with the personality and character of Claire being sort of understandable. The writing isn’t bad, but some of the sentences that need punctuations, like commas and periods, in them but instead only have straight text. Also the text boxes are quite. This isn’t that bad, but it does make it hard to read some things, especially if you read off a phone. The worst part about long text boxes are that if you lose your spot, it takes quite a bit of work to find where you just were. Try spacing out the sentences a bit more and if need be, only have 2-4 short sentences within a paragraph and double space afterwords. There are not enough chapters for me to judge on stability, so I might comment on this at a later date. The world background was pretty decent but I can’t tell exactly what type of world it is. Is it modern, Medieval, Post-apocalyptic, Or something else? Also are there any other races than far and goblin? Or is this story based in a world with only these two races. There are only 5 chapters out right now, so I don’t know if these questions are answered in the future. But I do know that I look forward to what the this novel holds as it shows a lot of promise. An interesting plot with a non-human character is always my type of novel👍