Review Detail of great_gamer in System: Harry The Harem lord

First, let me say that I have no writing experience before this novel, so, if you are expecting great writing from the first chapter, then I have to disappoint you. Of course, my writing gets better with each passing chapter, which you can see and compare with the 14th chapter. After the 14th chapter, each one is getting better. A few points to note: The story is about young Harry, who gets the system and some memories, in Harry Potter World. I will be adding new characters (most of the girls, few boys for the sake of the story). There will be nine Horcrux, not seven. Each year will be somewhat different from the original. Harry's main goal is to become Harem Lord, so the story will focus in that direction, not on Voldemort. There won't be cultivation. book will focus on magic. I am giving my novel five stars not for the current chapters, but for the future. Before the novel ends, it will have the quality of five starts. Believe it! (sounds like Naruto😃) I am writing this novel to improve my writing skills. I appreciate all the help I can get. Please leave me constructive remarks to enhance my writing if you may. Thank you!