Review Detail of BerriApplepi in Rise of The Beast King

You have a good story going on although I find some mistakes in some grammars. I also suggest if you capitalize the first letter of the following paragraphs and the character's names since there were parts where I find things confusing. Period and commas are important and I found that most of the parts didn't end with periods or some parts didn't have commas. But all in all, ignoring those parts, I actually like your story and it is pretty interesting, I find this promising. 😁😀