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The story begins very differently, with the mc being thrown in a queen's shoes, unfavoured, but heck, who cares right? Just treat your only in name husband as your boss! Honestly, the story is fun, however, the mc has basically no common sense, she is a wingman, professional third wheel, but as the story progresses, she only becomes a spoiled child who throws tantrums wherever she goes, sure, you were a caged bird prized by your 4 brothers for your entire life, you were spoiled rotten, however, if that is so, her flashbacks contain an entirely different persona, WHO IS THAT AT ALL??? If her brothers were so important to her, why the f**k is she not worried about how they will fell, why does she feel no desire to know how she got there, why the heck is she so emotionless and only f**king care about managing women and not having s*x with her husband???????? The names are confusing, the world has almost zero story, we only focus on the empress, her hobbies to lift boredom, the harem, the king, and her servants.... Btw, the mc has no difficulties in life, nothing ever changes for her, the problems she faces are so... trivial, not even worth mentioning, her life has no ups and downs, only ups. It's like we cannot watch her suffer something more horrific than her own death. However, everyone else for some reason has a one dimensional personality, and the mc has a unstable personality..... I really liked the synopsis, but I can't continue this story because now it irks me, there is nothing really attractive anymore, the WYY from the start is gone, transformed into an spoiled child who absolutely has no wife obligations, because btw, this *obviously* isn't ancient china, where if you are a woman, you need to live by the rules of your father, your husband and then your son.... Yeah, this is sh*t but that was how it was, if you are gonna do a story about that time.... Do not make it a fairy tale, it becomes stupid.
The Employed Empress
Xiao_yue
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Hello! Despite this not being your cup of tea, thank you for still giving it a try and reading. Also, thank you for the 'legit' review and explaining. As for the things you point out. First, from the start, WYY is selfish and childish. She literally hates responsibilities and would do anything to brush them off. Sure, she would do her work, but if she could pass it off at the 'minimum', she would. I did make her a very flawed MC. She thinks that the emperor is her new boss. It's like getting a transfer at work. For her emotion, I did kept it at the minimum. It was her workplace, they were her colleagues but not her family. At most, she would try to get along. Then the world-building, I'm moving it very very very slow XD. Sorry about that. There's a bunch of chara I haven't introduce yet. Heck, I'm still at the first volume. This is 'daily life' at most. As for the 'ancient' theme, I did made it light but I'm following the 'traditions'. I mix up all ancient traditions that are more lenient than their counterpart dynasties/eras. As for the charas being 1D, this hit me the most. As someone trying to build everyone's relationship before moving with the very plot, that's a fail for me. Thank you for pointing that out. I'll try to improve their personality. I write everything straight forward but the undertones I'm putting is not useless. You might caught it earlier than I desire, but wow. Anyway, this is long enough for my stance. Again, thank you for the honest review. This will help me in my continuous writing.
Ok, I might have been very harsh in my review, sorry about that, I should have phrased it better, I just kinda... Say what I think at the moment, and I expected very much from you, again, I'm sorry, it is a work you are putting effort in, and I pointed everything I felt frustrated for in your novel, buuut, I have no right to say you should change things, since I am only a reader, and you are the writer, the boss rules. xD I really hope that someday in the future, I can get back to this story and say "wow, this person has really gone far", or "this is so good to read". Again, I'm sorry for being that harsh, I just said the flaws I thought the story had, and hope that it will bring you more good than evil.... *I hope I did not pass on the impression that I'm a very bad evil witch haha, gl in your future chaps and works, and I hope I'll be there to cheer on you :)*
Xiao_yue:Hello! Despite this not being your cup of tea, thank you for still giving it a try and reading. Also, thank you for the 'legit' review and explaining. As for the things you point out. First, from the start, WYY is selfish and childish. She literally hates responsibilities and would do anything to brush them off. Sure, she would do her work, but if she could pass it off at the 'minimum', she would. I did make her a very flawed MC. She thinks that the emperor is her new boss. It's like getting a transfer at work. For her emotion, I did kept it at the minimum. It was her workplace, they were her colleagues but not her family. At most, she would try to get along. Then the world-building, I'm moving it very very very slow XD. Sorry about that. There's a bunch of chara I haven't introduce yet. Heck, I'm still at the first volume. This is 'daily life' at most. As for the 'ancient' theme, I did made it light but I'm following the 'traditions'. I mix up all ancient traditions that are more lenient than their counterpart dynasties/eras. As for the charas being 1D, this hit me the most. As someone trying to build everyone's relationship before moving with the very plot, that's a fail for me. Thank you for pointing that out. I'll try to improve their personality. I write everything straight forward but the undertones I'm putting is not useless. You might caught it earlier than I desire, but wow. Anyway, this is long enough for my stance. Again, thank you for the honest review. This will help me in my continuous writing.
No worries. It was a fair review and I do get the things you pointed out. It was a good feedback. Your review is far better than those who give a low rating then just put ihateit. Those just left us, writers, wondering what's wrong. Is there a plot hole or what? Honestly, I see them as trolls. Thank you for the support. :D
CruxL:Ok, I might have been very harsh in my review, sorry about that, I should have phrased it better, I just kinda... Say what I think at the moment, and I expected very much from you, again, I'm sorry, it is a work you are putting effort in, and I pointed everything I felt frustrated for in your novel, buuut, I have no right to say you should change things, since I am only a reader, and you are the writer, the boss rules. xD I really hope that someday in the future, I can get back to this story and say "wow, this person has really gone far", or "this is so good to read". Again, I'm sorry for being that harsh, I just said the flaws I thought the story had, and hope that it will bring you more good than evil.... *I hope I did not pass on the impression that I'm a very bad evil witch haha, gl in your future chaps and works, and I hope I'll be there to cheer on you :)*
Author, I haven't read your novel (just browsing the reviews first) but I want to commend you on your positive attitude towards this review. I wish more authors would take the critique as an avenue to know what they need to improve on in the future instead of a personal attack. Not every review is going to be a positive one but you can learn something from it. Your positive attitude has encouraged me to keep an eye out for your future novels (this one is not my cup of tea, I'm not into harem stories, they fill me with rageđ¤) Good luck to you in the future.