Review Detail of ZGearCecil in SuperDeku

Okay so, the first few chapters made me Cringe. Not because of the content, but the way it was laid out like a block of text. I couldn't read it, my eyes were going EVERYWHERE. I liked that the writing quality improved after say the third chapter where ideas, dialogues and points of view were separated by paragraphs. Overall I'd like to see where this goes, and I hope you come have a look at my work as well. Pip pip!