Review Detail of smktheslayer in Apocalypse Please

Shameless 5 star self-rating because i'm very confident i can pull a George R Martin on this novel. Lol jokes apart, this is my first novel on webnovel and hopefully not the last. Constructive criticisms very welcome. Trolling and flaming ? not so much... Be patient and help me on the path of becoming a true writting expert *eyes full of conviction* Rate this novel and vote to keep me doing a good work!