Review Detail of InnerVoice in Naruto in One Piece

I like the concept of naruto being in one piece but the story is very messy. I only read the 1st chapter and I can already tell. Example: when naruto was on fire, it was said that he did not hesitate to drench the flame on/inhis body and jump. The author didn’t said what he is hesitant about until after. Example 2: if ace is dead, how can he even interact and save naruto from the river? Makes no sense to me. But like I said, love the concept of the story so don’t take this the wrong way. I can tell this can be a good novel, just need a little improvement in grammar and organization of content