Review Detail of MC_Darwin in Divine Emperor of Death

I am about 60 chapters in and I gotta be honest this is a good concept, with a lot of potential. However the character interaction throws me off. To be frank I can tell this is Mr. Author’s first attempt really writing something and a there’s a simple bit of advice here that I think can help a lot, and that is “Show don’t Tell”. (bear with me) What I mean by this is I don’t want you to tell me about everything a character is thinking(unless it’s the protagonist). show me signs/clues through dialogue and physical observations that show me what a character might be thinking. Take inspiration from real conversations you have in everyday life, note that at no point can I read the mind of someone else. The reader should want to question the motives of a character and feel like they are in the situation themselves. All in all I will try to keep reading but I have yet to see any significant depth to most of the characters, this is in part due to the slow pacing I think. The only character I like is the father(emperor) as I personally know someone who acts somewhat similar. I made this review is just as much for the author as I did for the readers so...if your a reader looking for any of this: seriousness/fast paced/action filled/non-shoata MC/Realistic interactions. The first few chapters don’t really cut it, but who’s to say that won’t change in the future? The story has the potential to get good. This was made in no way to hate or offend but to offer constructive feedback! **: I am tired af right now so sorry if this review doesn’t make sense or you find any errors. I might come back to edit. —M.C. Darwin