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There is a visible improvement in the plot and writing quality as chapters progresses. Although rough at the beginning, it is an enjoyable read which smoothens after chap 30. Updates are fast as well. If I had any complaints, it would be about the character depth. The only characters to be given good depth would be clara, and now evelynn. On the other hand, davis seems to lack proper depth. To give an example, his feelings and thought patterns after killing million people or criminals could have been given better depth. Although the readers get that he is a bit broken due to torture, a modern person killing that many people without much of a sleepless night is eerie. Or, you could have given a bit description about him feeling indifferent about it and his contemplation about the matter-like in parasyte. The same should be done in enemies as well. A complex thought structure in antagonists can really make fights and manipulation more enjoyable. World background also needs a careful consideration. I am not talking about the world or empires, because the author already specified that the continent is desolate from others and also talked about geography of the continent. What I mean is about the races, cultivation, or hierarchy of power. Kinda like, what is the power of sects or clans in an empire(because most tend to be independent, but they seem to be connected here)? Is cultivation widespread among common people? Are the empires the only great powers in the continent? If sects depend on empires, would a disciple of a certain sect only be chosen from given empire and need to fight for it (because other novels have sects seperate from secular world)?
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'On the other hand, davis seems to lack proper depth. To give an example, his feelings and thought patterns after killing million people or criminals could have been given better depth. Although the readers get that he is a bit broken due to torture, a modern person killing that many people without much of a sleepless night is eerie. Or, you could have given a bit description about him feeling indifferent about it and his contemplation about the matter-like in parasyte." I'm pretty sure he contemplated it about for a month and determined to himself as long as he in this world, he will be ready to kill, except innocents. Check Ch.29, Although I didn't write his whole contemplation, I wrote what he at least determined lastly. As for character depth, I wrote a lot of thoughts that he was thinking. So I guess you might pretty much start to understand him now? "The same should be done in enemies as well. A complex thought structure in antagonists can really make fights and manipulation more enjoyable." There are no antagonists right now, so for the remaining ones, I gave them all a small amount of personality and finished them off. "World background also needs a careful consideration. I am not talking about the world or empires, because the author already specified that the continent is desolate from others and also talked about geography of the continent. What I mean is about the races, cultivation, or hierarchy of power. Kinda like, what is the power of sects or clans in an empire(because most tend to be independent, but they seem to be connected here)? Is cultivation widespread among common people? Are the empires the only great powers in the continent? If sects depend on empires, would a disciple of a certain sect only be chosen from given empire and need to fight for it (because other novels have sects seperate from secular world)?" The reason I didn't give World Building here was that he won't stay here for long, so I deemed it unnecessary. But you asked for it, I'll write it in the upcoming chapters. "Also death note, it would be better if there was some restriction- like it can only be used on people with soul power less than him. Or else, it would be too OP while fighting enemies and mc would not need to use his brains." He can only use it to kill enemies one stage above him, that's his limit. If I don't even give that, then the Death Note will become trash. Cheers
Darkdelusion:Also death note, it would be better if there was some restriction- like it can only be used on people with soul power less than him. Or else, it would be too OP while fighting enemies and mc would not need to use his brains.
Stardust_Breaker:'On the other hand, davis seems to lack proper depth. To give an example, his feelings and thought patterns after killing million people or criminals could have been given better depth. Although the readers get that he is a bit broken due to torture, a modern person killing that many people without much of a sleepless night is eerie. Or, you could have given a bit description about him feeling indifferent about it and his contemplation about the matter-like in parasyte." I'm pretty sure he contemplated it about for a month and determined to himself as long as he in this world, he will be ready to kill, except innocents. Check Ch.29, Although I didn't write his whole contemplation, I wrote what he at least determined lastly. As for character depth, I wrote a lot of thoughts that he was thinking. So I guess you might pretty much start to understand him now? "The same should be done in enemies as well. A complex thought structure in antagonists can really make fights and manipulation more enjoyable." There are no antagonists right now, so for the remaining ones, I gave them all a small amount of personality and finished them off. "World background also needs a careful consideration. I am not talking about the world or empires, because the author already specified that the continent is desolate from others and also talked about geography of the continent. What I mean is about the races, cultivation, or hierarchy of power. Kinda like, what is the power of sects or clans in an empire(because most tend to be independent, but they seem to be connected here)? Is cultivation widespread among common people? Are the empires the only great powers in the continent? If sects depend on empires, would a disciple of a certain sect only be chosen from given empire and need to fight for it (because other novels have sects seperate from secular world)?" The reason I didn't give World Building here was that he won't stay here for long, so I deemed it unnecessary. But you asked for it, I'll write it in the upcoming chapters. "Also death note, it would be better if there was some restriction- like it can only be used on people with soul power less than him. Or else, it would be too OP while fighting enemies and mc would not need to use his brains." He can only use it to kill enemies one stage above him, that's his limit. If I don't even give that, then the Death Note will become trash. Cheers
