Review Detail of AFJDS in Life Merchant

Plenty of good ideas but idk why you decided to suddenly add 10 different cliches in 5chapters. The whole birthday party and pirate part is full of absurd situations brought by stupid decisions and extremely unlikely scenarios. Suspension of disbelief can only take us so far. The main problem is how scatered everything is. The MC is juggling twenty different things at the same time, both women and classes. I know I wrote more about the problems than the qualities but both the power and the world itself is pretty cool and interesting. Idk if the arena thing is common but it’s the first time I’m seeing it and it’s creative.