Review Detail of FieldBear in Demon Lord's Reincarnation

It seems like an interesting story. It is just that the sentence structure is so awkward that I keep getting pulled out of the story. I would suggest getting someone with a good proficiency with English grammar to edit your your chapters. As this is for the first chapters, it might improve later. In that case, I would suggest doing an editing run yourself to fix these issues. I would return and try again if that is done. Good luck.