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David_Drake
David_DrakeLv44yrDavid_Drake

We don't know much about the world the MC is in. Instead we know that the MC has some kind of bromance with his hero friend. His friend is very annoying and I don't understand why the MC would deal with his crap. Isn't the MC suppose to be a Demon King? You kept saying he is so strong on par with S ranks, but he runs away from a elder lich even though he killed a king drake. Then we have Hilda who is the worst companion you could've gave the MC. You didn't even try to make her likable for the readers and now we're stuck with the MC dealing with her crappy attitude. But the thing I dislike the most in this story is how you've made his sword spirit into some kind of long lost friend. That they met in a previous life 'eons' ago and now the sword spirit is trying to rekindle their relationship even though the MC doesn't have memories of her. I feel like you're trying to hard to make a 'cool' MC and forgot to make realistic developments. I suggest you should amend these things by going back and focusing on one thing at a time. Because right now you have the hero school arc, underworld arc and adventurer arc all mashed together into a mess. Instead plot out these arcs one at a time and finish them with out worrying about the other arcs. After which you'll have an easier time interconnecting these timelines together for a smoother read. Giving the characters proper time to develop. I do hope you'll take my advice and make some changes later on.

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Demon Lord's Reincarnation

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lynerparel
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The sword spirit thing has already been predetermined since long ago. Also like I explained in the novel demon Lord is just a title it doesn't necessarily mean he's a bad guy. The relationship with Valdel is the whole point of the story. Also the arca meshing together is an idea where in real life lots of things happen at the same time, it doesn't happen in a chronological order. Finally this is a parody of sorts that is just making fun of some cliches I read overtime, like I said in the beginning this novel was created just for fun since I was having a writer's block. Well anyway thanks for reading.

Jack_Balu
Jack_BaluLv3Jack_Balu

I found a book its named Story of legends i recommend it book was amazing you should check it out

Boris_Ngwoh
Boris_NgwohLv1Boris_Ngwoh

I'm pretty amazed by this book, can't wait to get a notification saying it's other part is completed.

lynerparel:The sword spirit thing has already been predetermined since long ago. Also like I explained in the novel demon Lord is just a title it doesn't necessarily mean he's a bad guy. The relationship with Valdel is the whole point of the story. Also the arca meshing together is an idea where in real life lots of things happen at the same time, it doesn't happen in a chronological order. Finally this is a parody of sorts that is just making fun of some cliches I read overtime, like I said in the beginning this novel was created just for fun since I was having a writer's block. Well anyway thanks for reading.